(Writing Advice)Draft 3.3 AssignmentLength1200 wordsWorks Cited8 Items (Minimum), MLADueTue, April 4Turned in where?Blackboard (upload file), Interactive Web (copy and paste), and bring to class (printout) with line numbers added.For Draft 3.3 revise parts of Draft 3.2 that I have recommended and (maybe) your peers have suggested, expand your Works Cited to at least 8 items in MLA Works Cited format, and increase the draft to 1200 words.Draft 3.1 was a “brainstorming draft”, and Draft 3.2 was a “structuring draft” for which I recommended a “problem/causes/solution” pattern of organization. Draft 3.3 is the final draft in your third essay cycle (Essay Cycle 3) and should be a “clean copy” draft. (Please read the criteria for the clean-copy draft in that link.)The main thing you should do for this Draft 3.3 is to read your draft out loud before you turn it in. Student writers tend to make sloppy errors and produce very awkward text that they would normally fix easily if they caught the awkward parts, but their eyes miss them. But their ears — your ears — will catch the awkward parts almost every time.Remember!This third essay cycle does NOT create a complete description of your issue, but only provides a description of the current poliics or stakeholders of your semester issue. For this essay cycle, you are focusing on who the stakeholders of an issue are (often politicians, but not necessarily so) and why they believe what they do. I have chosen these issues because they are considered troubling issues with much controversy in our world today, so you should have no trouble finding information in our library’s database.Here’s some advice:When describing an “increase” of anything, give statistics and corresponding details: who, what, where, when, and why. Better still, make a chart showing the increase over time.Specific details are always better than vague generalities.Always identify the expertise (credentials) of the people you cite.When comparing two of anything — populations, countries, dates in time, diseases, whatever — give specific statistics: better, make a chart so that the reader can “see” the comparison.When discussing specific laws, give the name and specific background information: who, what, where, when, and why.I WILL BE PLACING A STRONG EMPHASIS ON CORRECT MLA IN-TEXT AND WORKS CITED FORMATTING.Remember my advice on first paragraphs!Every first paragraph shouldHave an engaging and intriguing first sentence.Provide important establishing information (who, what, where, when).Contain a thesis statement that tells the reader what your MAIN POINT will be.Contain a foreshadowing of the most important finding in your draft.Important assertions should be defended by expert testimony.Be free of any of the 10 targeted errors!This is the critic fromthe professor.I evaluate draft 3.2 on how well it establishes stakeholders in your issue, both sides (or three — could be) and how well it follows a POINTS and Particulars organization and builds a clear structure of exposition. I may have highlighted or commented on your text, so be sure to look at it in Blackboard.The most important sentence is your first sentence, and the most important paragraph is your first paragraph. You want to avoid what I call “fluff” in that first sentence, which is a general, philosophical, open-ended comment that neither startles the reader nor provides the reader new information. You want to make the reader think that he or she is going to read something unusual and informing in the rest of the document, and a weak first sentence in a weak first paragraph doesn’t do that. In addition, you want to tell the reader “what/why,” or what it is you’re going to be writing about and why you are writing it. Your first sentence is, I’m afraid, quite bland and does not tell the college-educated reader anything that he or she does not already know. So, I’m afraid, is your second sentence. your third sentence is also not very informative or engaging. This first paragraph is extremely important, as I say above, and needs to be engaging, provocative, and informative as it tells the reader what is coming up. Using three sentences to explain that abortion is a difficult issue in America does not contribute much for college-educated reader.Frankly, I would completely rewrite this first paragraph. In this essay cycle three, you want to convey the idea that there are responsible people on both sides of this extremely important issue, but to do that you must provide information and – data – that emphasizes the magnitude of the problem. this first paragraph simply states clichés about how people feel about abortion.For this class, I strongly encourage students to use quotations and not summary or paraphrase when they use sourced research. Quotations are much more easily tracked down and validated than is summary or paraphrase. Later on in your academic career, your teachers will want you to use intelligent summary and paraphrase, but for this class I would much prefer quotations.If you can’t come up with a better first paragraph, I would suggest you start with the second paragraph, which has its own problems but is much stronger and is much more engaging than your first paragraph. As you can tell, I take these initial entries into a draft very seriously, and much more so in your draft 3.3.You do not need ellipses (the three dots) before or after a quotation, but only in the middle if you have eliminated part of the quote.Too much of this draft concerns background and history, which was the focus of your essay cycle one and should not be the focus of this essay cycle. We already have the background and the history: what we need are the stakeholders who are supporting either side of this intentions issue. Providing more facts and details about abortion and who lives and who dies is not the focus of this essay cycle. Why are people against abortion, and why are people for abortion, and who are these people? This should not be a very difficult task since those for and against abortion are very clear in their statements and their reasons.You mentioned the “right to life movement,” but who supports this, specifically? You mention the choice movement, but who specifically supports this? The whole concept behind essay cycle three is that you cannot fully understand the magnitude of the struggle behind this very contentious issue if you do not understand the groups and people who are fighting it out legally and in the media. Be as specific as you can when you describe who is on what side and for what reason. I would advise that you use the library’s databases, most specifically academic search complete, to provide the best and firmest information on the subjectYour works cited is incorrect. The problem may be in the title, in the line spacing (should be double spacing throughout), and the hanging indentation, and what you are putting in quotation marks and italicizing, or with the lack of terminal punctuation, or with the lack of alphabetizing. Please figure out what is wrong and amend accordingly. So you have serious problems with this Works cited and I’m not going to list those problems. Please look at your handbook or the Purdue owl to see how a works cited should be properly handled. I will include a video that explains the most important elements of an academic work cited.http://fredkemp.com/kempclass/assign/showvideo.inc.php?fn=33 Attached is 3.2 just add 400 words and correct what the professor said.
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Name: Kenora Adams
Professor: Kemp
Course: Freshmen Writing
Date: March 18, 2017
Abortion Rights
Abortion happens when a woman decides to terminate her pregnancy. In most instances,
the practice of abortion happens in the first twenty-eight days of the pregnancy (Luker 118). The
issue of abortion is one that has been of concern in the United States and has raised the concern
from many people. Abortion has even taken center stage in the politics of the United States.
Some people feel that abortion should be made legal and that some funds from the states should
be set aside to assist those who wish to procure abortion so that they can have it through means
that are not harmful to their health and their lives (Craig and David 189).
However, a majority of the Americans feel that life is sacred and that people should not
be granted the right to abort. A great example of a politician who feels that abortion should be
banned completely is the current president of the United States, Donald Trump. Even if the
issues on abortion mainly concerns women, a majority of them feel that it is wrong and should be
prohibited in all the states (Jelen 168). Additionally, politicians who have the interest in the
women in America and those like to show their interest in women restrict the rights to abortion
in their jurisdictions using all means at their disposal.
The church is also strongly opposed to abortion and fights the same using all means. The
church has come out in the public to condemn abortion and the use of contraceptives since they
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feel it is also a form of abortion. This is an issue that has created loggerheads between the church
and some Christians who feel that the issue should be a personal decision. They feel that the
practice should be allowed and the rights should be given to them without any kind of
discrimination.
During the eighteenth century until the year 1880, women had the right to abort. The
practice was considered as being legal under the common law and many people practiced it.
This, however, changed in the late nineteenth century and would only be allowed when the
pregnancy was seen to be a danger to the life of the mother. This is an issue used by politicians
to win votes from people, especially those who are pro-life (Segers and Timothy 127). The
concern is, however, not aimed at solving the problem that people have in the society, the main
aim is usually to get elected to the office.
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Works Cited
Craig, Barbara H, and David M. O’Brien. Abortion and American Politics. Chatham, NJ:
Chatham House Publ, 2013. Print.
Jelen, Ted G. Perspectives on the Politics of Abortion. Westport, Conn. [u.a.: Praeger, 2015.
Print.
Luker, Kristin. Abortion and the Politics of Motherhood. Berkeley: University of California
Press, 2012. Internet resource.
Segers, Mary C, and Timothy A. Byrnes. Abortion Politics in American States. Armonk, N.Y:
M.E. Sharpe, 2015. Internet resource.
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